I finished a new book, took it through an extensive revision (in which I moved scenes around, reworked motivations and then switched everything back—haha), and then revised it again.
Now, it’s time to see if my BETA readers think it’s worth anyone’s time.
Here’s the log line:
THE LOST ONES
A downsized teacher and betrayed husband takes a factory job where he will stand up against oppressive bullies, dare to find new love with a young mother who fears being hurt, and risk his life to solve the four-year-old mystery of a child’s disappearance.
Here’s hoping people dig it …
Potentially very intriguing. As usual, I love Fincher’s dark cinematography. He may actually make a more-effective version of the story than the novel which, after the reveal at the start of the second part lost most of its interest for me. As for the use of the song in this trailer, it seemed odd at first, but it works. The song’s message may be a positive one, but the tone fits with the film’s creepiness.
What you do is write letters to yourself. Literally. ‘Dear David, my name is Timothy Cavendish, I’m in my sixties, we’ve met once before few years ago when you wrote Ghostwritten. Person I love most in the world is this. What I’m afraid most of in the world is this. What I think about god, money, sex, work is this, this, this and this.’ You cover about twenty basis and you use their language. Not my language because they’re writing a letter to me. Do that two or three times and they’re kind of real enough to then stand on their own feet and talk. That’s it.
Basis? That’s got to be a transcription error. Still: awesome.
Much better than crafting character backstory in third person. Let the characters speak in their voice and try to seduce you of their worthiness.
Great advice …
"What Happens When You Wake Up in the Night"
by Michael Marshall